Fallon Hayes said:
"Think the two photos on the article are too similar, maybe the cover headshot and a full body photo in a different surrounding could work. The quote from the article doesn't really sound right either, something like "The idea that people are coming solely to see me will be an situation I've never experienced before". The pictures on the contents look a tad odd because of the colour + b&w one together, if you decide to do another photo for the article like I suggested then maybe that one could replace the b&w photo from the contents. You've used the headshot from the cover on every page so would just give it a bit more variety. Think it should be in colour too so the contents looks a bit cleaner and has a more established colour scheme."
Louis Pollock said: "I like the name of your magazine and how this matches your genre of music for the magazine, I feel that your contents page is too plain and can be improved. But overall a very good Draft :)"
Phoebe Williams said: "cover could be more busy with more sell lines. I like the font used on the cover its a very eye catching element especially because of the bright white used. you could perhaps keep the just two columns going straight down under your contents page pictures and make sure the pictures are the same size so the columns are equal in width. the double page spared could have the quote in a box within the article so that the writing doesn't look to daunting for the reader. over all this is a good draft well done."
